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these pieces really struck a chord - they feel like someone discovering their own mortality for the first time in practice, which is something both relevant and hard to capture. great job!
i adore how the formatting elevates the feeling of the piece :] I love it
there is so much love and peace coming through in your poems, even when you express a certain grief. it makes for a really cozy experience as a reader, really like them!
i really enjoyed your prompt fills for the wordpool week and the transition week! they were so beautiful, your writing is both delicate and strong. - j
This is really moving, I love how it starts and ends with the same line
@percevalprintpress thank you!!! though, the lines are slightly different! - j and therry
your use of enjambment is inspired, you have a way of moving readers from one line to the next that works so well. incredible poem!
@symphonic thank you!!! therry wanted to write about our first transition between system hosts, we hope it resonates :0 - j
this is so beautiful and vulnerable, you put so well into words the aftermath of a kind of liminal grief. thank you for sharing!
this is really nice and bittersweet, im no poetry expert but i love the way you structured this. simple and poignant, i love it
this is really great, i feel for you. thank you for sharing your words and experiences!
this is such a beautiful thought - we don't talk enough about how non-linear life can be at times. congratulations on your first piece!
this is such a strong and vulnerable piece of writing - thank you so much for sharing it with us, this is beyond beautiful!
I think you encapsulated perfectly the idea of adulthood as compromise, there is something so beautiful about how you used such a small moment in daily life to communicate a strong concept!
absolutely love the imagery you built, the visual element was a really nice touch!
love the sonnet structure and the story - they mesh really well together!
i like this work a lot!!! it's very different to my poem, but that's okay! i love seeing all the responses :)
what a beautiful monologue - really love the images you built through your prose!
that's honestly so impressive! your choice of words and structure feel very carefully thought-out, I really like how it flows!
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I actually think you used the prompt as a jumping-off point very well - you explored the idea of asymmetry as a discrepancy between previously and currently held notions beautifully. it's a strong piece, love the final line!
gosh this is so very beautiful!
oh this is amazing!!! i really enjoyed your exploration of the prompt actually, i think there is a certain asymmetry in growing up and filling the space that opens up to you.