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I really appreciate the honesty and self-awareness of this piece, I especially like how you called back to your earlier poems. I love the imagery of the porch in the middle!

Something I've been doing with Muse pieces in general is callbacks! Usually via metaphors echoing forwards. I find it fun and it inspires me to find ways to connect them.

this is really beautiful!!! i loved reading it! thank you so much for sharing, the imagery was fantastic and dazzling!

there is a lot of honesty in this piece that is very well-balanced with a certain artistic flair. I really like the format of the Shakespearean sonnet and the rhyme scheme, I think it adds to the musicality of the piece quite well!

incredibly relatable, love your use of Icarion as a word. also, don't know if you did this on purpose but "i pray everyday for my body to align with the plans i fashion in my mind" is very tran/non-binary coded, which i loved.

Sometimes you read the first line of a poem and know it'll be good. This is one of those poems. The rest followed through, but that first line is going to stick with me.

this was wonderful and relatable... i loved the rhyme scheme and the overall sentiment. i like that it seemed to be positive at the end, there is hope! remember to take care of yourself.

ohhh maybe i just love how a blank website page feels like a cathedral but this hit so hard & so well ... rlly lovely imagery ! !

@angelogistics there is something holy to be found in enclosed emptiness… thank you for the praise <3

what a beautiful and poignant poem - seconding that the imagery is stunning, you incapsulated so much history, grief and hope in a few words. thank you for sharing your artistry with us!

@ryomakesthings thank *you* for reading and appreciating!

The fractal horses of all things really connected with me. Gorgeous visuals, and it feels rooted somehow in a way that a lot of poetry doesn't.

@owlroost thank you, i had fun imagining an infinite scale of little horses heheh

this was really awesome - everybody who said that the imagery is amazing is absolutely correct. an amazing piece. thank you for sharing!

absolutely love the format! very effective choice to have no punctuation, it makes the abundant imagery all the more potent!

thank you so much ryo!!! i was worried it would take away a lot of the clarity (not a bad thing in itself) but that that would compromise the impact. i'm glad it didn't!

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this was so beautiful, i genuinely feel a bit tearful now! i'm really glad to have read this! thank you for sharing!

this is such a well-crafted and evocative piece of writing. the last two lines especially are so powerful!

i really liked this one! it really highlights just how panicked one's anxious thoughts can become, and it really nailed it on the head with how quickly it tends to escalate too. i especially like the touch of making it a run-on.

i love the rambling style of this!! i feel like it helps add to the emotion of the piece mwah

i like this a lot!! it's very cool and the run on structure is excellent. great work as always, ryo!

really liked the escalation of scale and how you cheekily tied it back to the beginning ^^

I really like how you focussed on not only the graduality of distress but that of hope, as well. I appreciate how it ends on a note of self-forgiveness, the whole thing put a smile on my face. the format is also very interesting!

thank you! when writing it i was thinking of a computer terminal, and the straightforwardness of prompt fills.

very honest, i like how much it rings out in the darkness :o)

this was really nice to read, i'm glad there was hope as well as despair and that it all felt like a process with the best intentions of the character/voice in mind, by the end of it!

this is so amazing... i really loved reading through it, it's beautiful and the repetition is so powerful and poignant. so proud of you for sharing this, thank you.

i teared up reading this T-T very good work

what a beautiful and powerful lament. I love how you went down each line one at a time and how terribly human it all is. thank you for your art!