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love the use of the Shakespearean sonnet and iambic pentameter, you always build such beautiful imagery in your poems. especially like the recurring contrast between the spiritual and carnal planes!

That first line? Brilliant. Got my attention immediately because of the imagery of it. The first lines for each stanza, really, but especially the very first one.

@ryo Thank you so much! I appreciate this. I actually read a lot of Baudelaire poems from The Flowers of Evil because @melxncholyman has a page dedicated to them, so this was sort of a response to what I read. Although, I am all about carnal spirituality! - Efir

@owlroost Thank you so much. I really wanted to bring the image of trace elements of decaying bodies being a part of living plants. - Efir

this is a really cool interpretation of the prompt!!! well done, i liked reading it a lot!!

oh omg i just saw the softness prompt... it's so lovely!!! you did an amazing job!! i really feel that about my sister!

there is so much emotional vulnerability and openness in your work - I especially like how you used the comic format in the prompt from a few weeks ago!

this is really beautiful and moving!! well done!

love the imagery you built, it's very raw yet carefully crafted!

thank you both so much!!

this is such a sweet poem, there is almost a kind of nostalgia in it. also love how compact it is, I think the length works really well!

ohhh this is lovely!!! it makes me happy to think about!!!

Love it, relatable.

real poem not just rambly prose this tiem

I really like the choice of formatting it as a prayer, it's a real bittersweet poem in that sense - how it speaks to a certain hope within the desperation and grief. great job!

this is extremely beautiful, i love it so much. pj strikes once again with poetry that speaks to my soul - j

I love how you interpreted the prompt - it's such a raw feeling that you're describing. really powerful piece!

i like this a lot!!! it's very powerful and visceral and i enjoy that about poetry in general, so well done :D - j

ooo i love how you phrased this, it's simple but evocative. "everything of the world, and nothing of myself" is such a good line.

love love LOVE the structure, repetition is one of my favorite poettic devices !!!

this is an excellent poem, it's really punchy and gets the message across beautifully without being too forceful... well done!!

obsessed with the humour and lightness of this, and the detailed culinary notes. love it!

@ryomakesthings thank you!!! i felt like writing something fun, but also complaining about that cup of coffee lol (i ended up finishing it, it somehow got better, or maybe i just got used to the taste)

omg this was so funny and heartwarming to read... i'm imagining it perfectly, thank you for sharing!